标题: Is there anybody who is good at English?Lend me a hand [打印本页] 作者: 尘羽泯 时间: 2013-2-16 12:37 标题: Is there anybody who is good at English?Lend me a hand I am going to attend an independent enrollment interview of a university.An appropriate introduction is needed.Following is the draft,which I hope you can help me to polish and correct some grammar mistakes I made.Because this is an oral introduction,the diction should not be to formal.
I'm XXX,from XXX High School.My hobby is computer programming.I bought many books about Ruby,C++,Delphi,OpenGL and Assembly language,and I learned them myself when I was in junior high school.So,two years ago,I coded an OpenGL-based multi-threaded graphics engine and subconsequently built a website and earned a fortune.
Because of this experience where I had to log on some foreign forums such as OpenGL.org to discuss some technical topics in English,I realized the importance of English.As a result,I made it a rule to listen to English podcasts every day;and keep an English diary every night.Gradually,English has become part and parcel of my life.Ultimately,I devoted myself to major in English.This is not a compromise,but I will learn programming myself or minor in it and try starting my own business while in university.My dream is to own a business of myself,not just to be a self-employed freelancer.I motto is where there is a will there is a way,so I believe I can make it with my will!作者: 尘羽泯 时间: 2013-2-16 12:39
Of course you should teach me to pronunce those technical terms.....such as Delphi..作者: R-零 时间: 2013-2-16 12:40 本帖最后由 R-零 于 2013-2-16 12:49 编辑
I am going to attend an independent enrollment interview of a university.
我正在参加一场大学自主招生考试
An appropriate introduction is needed.
需要一份合适的简介
Following is the draft,which I hope you can help me to polish and correct some grammar mistakes I made.
下面是草稿，我希望大家可以帮我找出并指正一些语法错误
Because this is an oral introduction,the diction should not be to formal.
因为这是口头表述，所以措辞不是很正规
I'm XXX,from XXX High School.My hobby is computer programming.
I bought many books about Ruby,C++,Delphi,OpenGL and Assembly language,and I learned them myself when I was in junior high school.
So,two years ago,I coded an OpenGL-based multi-threaded graphics engine and subconsequently built a website and earned a fortune.
Because of this experience where I had to log on some foreign forums such as OpenGL.
org to discuss some technical topics in English,I realized the importance of English.As a result,I made it a rule to listen to English podcasts every day;
and keep an English diary every night.Gradually,English has become part and parcel of my life.Ultimately,
I devoted myself to major in English.This is not a compromise,
but I will learn programming myself or minor in it and try starting my own business while in university.
My dream is to own a business of myself,not just to be a self-employed freelancer.
I motto is where there is a will there is a way,so I believe I can make it with my will!作者: 幽兰戴尔 时间: 2013-2-16 13:00
哪所大学的自主招生是英文简历吗……难道是留学生？
想当初我们大学搞自主招生的时候，也只是考考试而已。作者: 结城照美 时间: 2013-2-16 13:23
I'm XXX,from XXX High School.——不加逗号比较好？
So,two years ago,I coded an OpenGL-based multi-threaded graphics engine and subconsequently built a website and earned a fortune.
看得人眼花，你考虑一下阅读者的感受吧....
Because of this experience where I had to log on some foreign forums such as OpenGL.org to discuss some technical topics in English
这个是什么从句为什么where的先行词是experience...？
As a result我觉得在这里用意思不太恰当的样子....
I motto is where there is a will there is a way,so I believe I can make it with my will!
Is there anybody who is good at English? Lend me a hand.
I am going to attend an independent enrollment interview of a university.An appropriate introduction is needed.The Following is the draft,which I hope you can help me to polish and correct some grammar mistakes I made.Because this is an oral introduction,the diction should not be too formal.
I'm XXX,from XXX High School.My hobby is computer programming.I bought many books about Ruby,C++,Delphi,OpenGL and Assembly language,and I learned them myself when I was in junior high school. So ,two years ago,I coded an OpenGL-based multi-threaded graphics engine and subconsequently built a website and earned a fortune.
Because of the experience that I had to log on some foreign forums such as OpenGL.org to discuss some technical topics in English,I realized the importance of English.As a result,I made it a rule to listen to English podcasts every day;and keep an English diary every night.Gradually,English has become part and parcel of my life.Ultimately,I devoted myself to majoring in English.This is not a compromise,but I will learn programming myself or minor in it and try starting my own business while in university.My dream is to own a business of my own,not just to be a self-employed freelancer.My motto is where there is a will there is a way,so I believe I can make it with my will!作者: 越前リョーマ 时间: 2013-2-16 13:48
我同学报港大也是写英文简历的作者: 紫英晓狼1130 时间: 2013-2-16 13:51
翻译(不知道大家能不能看到我的回复，我怎么看不到？)
正因为有这样的经历，我必须登录一些外国论坛等opengl.org讨论英语中的一些技术问题，我意识到英语的重要性。因此，我养成了每天听英语广播；每天坚持写英语日记。渐渐地，英语已成为我生活的的重要组成部分。最终，我从事英语专业的。这是一个不妥协，但我会规划自己或辅修学习和尝试自己创业在大学的时候。我的梦想是拥有一个我自己的业务，不仅是一个个体的自由职业者。我的座右铭是哪里有一个将有一种方式，所以我相信我能用我的意志！作者: 血色正义 时间: 2013-2-16 17:40 我是一个爱国的人作者: 荷包PIG蛋 时间: 2013-2-16 18:02
真&直白的翻译：
我要去参加一个独立的大学入学面试。一个适当的引进是必要的。以下是该草案,我希望你能帮助我去波兰和纠正一些语法错误我犯了。因为这是一个口头介绍,措词不应是正式的。
我是XXX,从XXX中学。我的爱好是计算机编程。我买了很多书关于Ruby,C + +,Delphi,OpenGL和汇编语言,我学会了自己当我在初中。所以,两年前,我编码一个opengl基于多线程图形引擎和subconsequently建了一个网站,赚了一大笔钱。
因为这次经历,我必须登录一些外国论坛如OpenGL.org讨论一些技术主题在英语,我意识到英语的重要性。因此,我规定每天听英语播客,每天晚上坚持写英语日记。渐渐地,英语已经成为我生活的一部分。最终,我全身心投入到主修英语。这不是一种妥协,但我将学习编程自己或辅修它并尝试自己创业而在大学。我的梦想是拥有一个商业的自己,不仅仅是一个个体的自由职业者。我的座右铭是有志者事竟成有一种方法,所以我相信我能让它与我的意志!作者: 星圣 时间: 2013-2-16 20:24
Error！Please change the words your wrote！
There are some mistakes in your's article!作者: orochi2k 时间: 2013-2-17 02:41
Behold! Here comes the Godking of NEOLITHIC! Look on my works ye mighty and despair!
我是一个爱国的人