Is there anybody who is good at English?Lend me a hand

尘羽泯

I am going to attend an independent enrollment interview of a university.An appropriate introduction is needed.Following is the draft,which I hope you can help me to polish and correct some grammar mistakes I made.Because this is an oral introduction,the diction should not be to formal.

I'm XXX,from XXX High School.My hobby is computer programming.I bought many books about Ruby,C++,Delphi,OpenGL and Assembly language,and I learned them myself when I was in junior high school.So,two years ago,I coded an OpenGL-based multi-threaded graphics engine and subconsequently built a website and earned a fortune.
Because of this experience where I had to log on some foreign forums such as OpenGL.org to discuss some technical topics in English,I realized the importance of English.As a result,I made it a rule to listen to English podcasts every day;and keep an English diary every night.Gradually,English has become part and parcel of my life.Ultimately,I devoted myself to major in English.This is not a compromise,but I will learn programming myself or minor in it and try starting my own business while in university.My dream is to own a business of myself,not just to be a self-employed freelancer.I motto is where there is a will there is a way,so I believe I can make it with my will!

尘羽泯

Of course you should teach me to pronunce those technical terms.....such as Delphi..

R-零

I am going to attend an independent enrollment interview of a university.
我正在参加一场大学自主招生考试
An appropriate introduction is needed.
需要一份合适的简介
Following is the draft,which I hope you can help me to polish and correct some grammar mistakes I made.
下面是草稿，我希望大家可以帮我找出并指正一些语法错误
Because this is an oral introduction,the diction should not be to formal.
因为这是口头表述，所以措辞不是很正规
I'm XXX,from XXX High School.My hobby is computer programming.

I bought many books about Ruby,C++,Delphi,OpenGL and Assembly language,and I learned them myself when I was in junior high school.

So,two years ago,I coded an OpenGL-based multi-threaded graphics engine and subconsequently built a website and earned a fortune.

Because of this experience where I had to log on some foreign forums such as OpenGL.

org to discuss some technical topics in English,I realized the importance of English.As a result,I made it a rule to listen to English podcasts every day;

and keep an English diary every night.Gradually,English has become part and parcel of my life.Ultimately,

I devoted myself to major in English.This is not a compromise,

but I will learn programming myself or minor in it and try starting my own business while in university.

My dream is to own a business of myself,not just to be a self-employed freelancer.

I motto is where there is a will there is a way,so I believe I can make it with my will!

幽兰戴尔

哪所大学的自主招生是英文简历吗……难道是留学生？
想当初我们大学搞自主招生的时候，也只是考考试而已。

结城照美

I'm XXX,from XXX High School.——不加逗号比较好？

So,two years ago,I coded an OpenGL-based multi-threaded graphics engine and subconsequently built a website and earned a fortune.

看得人眼花，你考虑一下阅读者的感受吧....

Because of this experience where I had to log on some foreign forums such as OpenGL.org to discuss some technical topics in English

这个是什么从句为什么where的先行词是experience...？

As a result我觉得在这里用意思不太恰当的样子....

I motto is where there is a will there is a way,so I believe I can make it with my will!

my motto吧？

仅供参考，我只有高中水平的英语...真的仅供参考....

原野清平

初中的我能说什么……

认真的学

大概看了一下，不保证修改的正确性= =

Is there anybody who is good at English? Lend me a hand.

I am going to attend an independent enrollment interview of a university.An appropriate introduction is needed.The Following is the draft,which I hope you can help me to polish and correct some grammar mistakes I made.Because this is an oral introduction,the diction should not be too formal.

I'm XXX,from XXX High School.My hobby is computer programming.I bought many books about Ruby,C++,Delphi,OpenGL and Assembly language,and I learned them myself when I was in junior high school. So ,two years ago,I coded an OpenGL-based multi-threaded graphics engine and subconsequently built a website and earned a fortune.
Because of the experience that I had to log on some foreign forums such as OpenGL.org to discuss some technical topics in English,I realized the importance of English.As a result,I made it a rule to listen to English podcasts every day;and keep an English diary every night.Gradually,English has become part and parcel of my life.Ultimately,I devoted myself to majoring in English.This is not a compromise,but I will learn programming myself or minor in it and try starting my own business while in university.My dream is to own a business of my own,not just to be a self-employed freelancer.My motto is where there is a will there is a way,so I believe I can make it with my will!

越前リョーマ

我同学报港大也是写英文简历的

紫英晓狼1130

翻译(不知道大家能不能看到我的回复，我怎么看不到？)

我要去参加一个大学的自主招生面试。一个适当的介绍是必要的。以下是该草案，我希望你能帮我润色和纠正一些语法错误。因为这是一种口头介绍，用语不应是正式的。

我叫XXX，来自XXX中学。我的爱好是电脑编程。我买了很多书，红宝石，C++，Delphi，OpenGL和汇编语言，我学会了他们自己当我在初中。所以，两年前，我的一个多线程编码基于OpenGL图形引擎和subconsequently建网站，赚了一大笔钱。

正因为有这样的经历，我必须登录一些外国论坛等opengl.org讨论英语中的一些技术问题，我意识到英语的重要性。因此，我养成了每天听英语广播；每天坚持写英语日记。渐渐地，英语已成为我生活的的重要组成部分。最终，我从事英语专业的。这是一个不妥协，但我会规划自己或辅修学习和尝试自己创业在大学的时候。我的梦想是拥有一个我自己的业务，不仅是一个个体的自由职业者。我的座右铭是哪里有一个将有一种方式，所以我相信我能用我的意志！

血色正义

我是一个爱国的人