Is there anybody who is good at English?Lend me a hand

尘羽泯

I am going to attend an independent enrollment interview of a university.An appropriate introduction is needed.Following is the draft,which I hope you can help me to polish and correct some grammar mistakes I made.Because this is an oral introduction,the diction should not be to formal.

I'm XXX,from XXX High School.My hobby is computer programming.I bought many books about Ruby,C++,Delphi,OpenGL and Assembly language,and I learned them myself when I was in junior high school.So,two years ago,I coded an OpenGL-based multi-threaded graphics engine and subconsequently built a website and earned a fortune.
Because of this experience where I had to log on some foreign forums such as OpenGL.org to discuss some technical topics in English,I realized the importance of English.As a result,I made it a rule to listen to English podcasts every day;and keep an English diary every night.Gradually,English has become part and parcel of my life.Ultimately,I devoted myself to major in English.This is not a compromise,but I will learn programming myself or minor in it and try starting my own business while in university.My dream is to own a business of myself,not just to be a self-employed freelancer.I motto is where there is a will there is a way,so I believe I can make it with my will!

orochi2k

Behold! Here comes the Godking of NEOLITHIC! Look on my works ye mighty and despair!

星圣

Error！Please change the words your wrote！
There are some mistakes in your's article!

荷包PIG蛋

真&直白的翻译：
我要去参加一个独立的大学入学面试。一个适当的引进是必要的。以下是该草案,我希望你能帮助我去波兰和纠正一些语法错误我犯了。因为这是一个口头介绍,措词不应是正式的。
我是XXX,从XXX中学。我的爱好是计算机编程。我买了很多书关于Ruby,C + +,Delphi,OpenGL和汇编语言,我学会了自己当我在初中。所以,两年前,我编码一个opengl基于多线程图形引擎和subconsequently建了一个网站,赚了一大笔钱。
因为这次经历,我必须登录一些外国论坛如OpenGL.org讨论一些技术主题在英语,我意识到英语的重要性。因此,我规定每天听英语播客,每天晚上坚持写英语日记。渐渐地,英语已经成为我生活的一部分。最终,我全身心投入到主修英语。这不是一种妥协,但我将学习编程自己或辅修它并尝试自己创业而在大学。我的梦想是拥有一个商业的自己,不仅仅是一个个体的自由职业者。我的座右铭是有志者事竟成有一种方法,所以我相信我能让它与我的意志!

血色正义

我是一个爱国的人

紫英晓狼1130

翻译(不知道大家能不能看到我的回复，我怎么看不到？)

我要去参加一个大学的自主招生面试。一个适当的介绍是必要的。以下是该草案，我希望你能帮我润色和纠正一些语法错误。因为这是一种口头介绍，用语不应是正式的。

我叫XXX，来自XXX中学。我的爱好是电脑编程。我买了很多书，红宝石，C++，Delphi，OpenGL和汇编语言，我学会了他们自己当我在初中。所以，两年前，我的一个多线程编码基于OpenGL图形引擎和subconsequently建网站，赚了一大笔钱。

正因为有这样的经历，我必须登录一些外国论坛等opengl.org讨论英语中的一些技术问题，我意识到英语的重要性。因此，我养成了每天听英语广播；每天坚持写英语日记。渐渐地，英语已成为我生活的的重要组成部分。最终，我从事英语专业的。这是一个不妥协，但我会规划自己或辅修学习和尝试自己创业在大学的时候。我的梦想是拥有一个我自己的业务，不仅是一个个体的自由职业者。我的座右铭是哪里有一个将有一种方式，所以我相信我能用我的意志！

越前リョーマ

我同学报港大也是写英文简历的

认真的学

大概看了一下，不保证修改的正确性= =

Is there anybody who is good at English? Lend me a hand.

I am going to attend an independent enrollment interview of a university.An appropriate introduction is needed.The Following is the draft,which I hope you can help me to polish and correct some grammar mistakes I made.Because this is an oral introduction,the diction should not be too formal.

I'm XXX,from XXX High School.My hobby is computer programming.I bought many books about Ruby,C++,Delphi,OpenGL and Assembly language,and I learned them myself when I was in junior high school. So ,two years ago,I coded an OpenGL-based multi-threaded graphics engine and subconsequently built a website and earned a fortune.
Because of the experience that I had to log on some foreign forums such as OpenGL.org to discuss some technical topics in English,I realized the importance of English.As a result,I made it a rule to listen to English podcasts every day;and keep an English diary every night.Gradually,English has become part and parcel of my life.Ultimately,I devoted myself to majoring in English.This is not a compromise,but I will learn programming myself or minor in it and try starting my own business while in university.My dream is to own a business of my own,not just to be a self-employed freelancer.My motto is where there is a will there is a way,so I believe I can make it with my will!

原野清平

初中的我能说什么……

结城照美

I'm XXX,from XXX High School.——不加逗号比较好？

So,two years ago,I coded an OpenGL-based multi-threaded graphics engine and subconsequently built a website and earned a fortune.

看得人眼花，你考虑一下阅读者的感受吧....

Because of this experience where I had to log on some foreign forums such as OpenGL.org to discuss some technical topics in English

这个是什么从句为什么where的先行词是experience...？

As a result我觉得在这里用意思不太恰当的样子....

I motto is where there is a will there is a way,so I believe I can make it with my will!

my motto吧？

仅供参考，我只有高中水平的英语...真的仅供参考....

幽兰戴尔

哪所大学的自主招生是英文简历吗……难道是留学生？
想当初我们大学搞自主招生的时候，也只是考考试而已。